Can you correct this grammatically?

It looks pretty good. However the last sentence seems awkward and has redundancies. You might want to eliminate the word "financially" in the last paragraph. It would then read "...cannot afford to send her..." You might also want to get rid of the phrase "as a family". The reader already knows that this statement is from her parents. It's sufficient to say "we cannot afford". Also rethink the part about "the school she deserves". Is there some other school that she doesn't deserve? Don't you really mean to say that "we cannot afford to send her to nursing school"?